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A really interesting poem with a compelling message and a nice, rhythmic structure.

If you want some constructive advice I'd draw your attention to the line "Must people be so cowardly – avoid the duty to protect and serve, even". I'm not sure why the word 'even' is put at the end of the line. Maybe there's a purpose I'm failing to see but to me it feels artificial, and gives the line that "instagram poetry" vibe.

Overall it's a good poem that's very easy to read, but one which inspires further thinking. I also like how the structure served the message. Well done!

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